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you have seen an advertisement in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter 1. Explain why you would like the job 2. give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ 3. say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to apply for the caretaker job to look after your child as mentioned in the newspaper advertisement.
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 is an amazing opportunity for me to spend my break
time
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 in
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australia
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Australia
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 while I wait for the completion of my residency visa process. I have completed my schooling in India and planning to move to
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australia
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 for my
further
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 education and thinking of getting the country's residency. I am living with a big family here in my home country and when I travel to
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australia
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. I am going to miss my family a lot
especially
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 my younger brothers. Fortunately, if I get
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 job,
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 I can spend a good amount of
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 with a family and most importantly I can be with your kid whom I will consider
as
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my brother. As I mentioned above, I am used to
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 with a lot of
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children
children's
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children
 most of the
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, and being an elder child in our family I had to look after my younger brothers since they were born as my parents were working. So, I believe I can take good care of your baby and please note that I am very good at reciting rhymes and singing
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a lullaby
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 for your little one. During my free
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, I am planning to prepare for university entrance exams and I have a bucket list of tourist places that I always wished to visit in
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 - mainly the beaches. I will spend some
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 visiting these attractions. Along with
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 letter, I have attached a personal photograph of myself, my visa application process and a reference letter from my cousin who lives in
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. Looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you. Regards Srinivasan M
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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