With advances in technological communication more and more people are able to work from home. This increase of homeworking had been of real benefit to workers.To what extent do you agree ot disagree with this idea?

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Nowadays, the use of technology is improving more and more and people prefer to work from
home
by using online platforms.
However
, there may have some problems but the advantages of working from
home
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such
as less cost of transportation
fee
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and more
time
with family are covering the cons. In my point of view, homeworking is highly beneficial to employees.
Firstly
, working from
home
reduces the transportation cost.
In today
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, living expenses are getting expensive.
However
, as the workers have no longer needed to go to
office
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, they can save money for extra things
such
as food and clothes.
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, the anxiety of the workers for car fuel,
cost
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of fixing
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the car
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car
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and overrated taxi fee are vanished away because of comfortably working at
home
.
Furthermore
, they can spend more money on other factors which
are
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they really need and want from transportation allowance.
Secondly
, getting more
time
with family is
the
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another benefit of homeworking. In the past, employees had to stay at
workplace
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from nine to five whether their
works
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are done or not. In order to get in
time
to
workroom
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, they need to prepare early in the morning and they rarely have
a
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small talk with their family as they are in a hurry. Since they start working at their
home
, they can adjust their working hours and handle their
works
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to get relaxation
time
. As an example, if the worker finishes his tasks for a day, he can able to spend
time
with
children
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and wife and create a precious
time
and a stronger bond with family.
Thus
, employees can build a healthier
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work life
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balance. With the increase
of
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technological communication and pandemic
situation
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, people are able to work from
home
.
Sometime
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they may have a few difficulties
of
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using technologies but
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latter
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they would find out the benefit of homeworking is more.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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