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The world of work is rapidly changing and employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes and suggest ways to prepare people to work in the future.

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The given line graph compares the smuggle of Australia with other countries namely Japan, the USA and China in percentage between the period 1990 to 2012. Overall, it is clear that the number of Australian ships to Japan and the United States continually decreased throughout the whole period, as well as, India showed a slight upward trend compared to China, which peaked in the chart at the end of 2012. In 1990, Japan accounted for the ship of almost 25% which decreased by nearly 8% in the
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 10 years, afterward, it did some fluctuations and stopped at about 17%, while the US had a percentage of 11 in 1990, which did fluctuation between 11 to 40% but climbed to almost 50% in 2012. India and Luxembourg, In 1990, started the transport race with Australia at o and 1 per cent respectively. But the exports of China dramatically increased to 28% within 32 years compared to India, which had a ratio of 40% after some ups and downs.
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