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With the development of tourism, more and more cheap and discount flights are made available to holidaymakers. Some environmental groups claim that governments should tax air traffic more because its growth has tremendous impact on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Since the
airplane
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 has been invented, more and more
people
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 start to travel abroad, and the capacity and volume of
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airplanes
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 have become greater than before,
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 would cause a lot of problems
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like
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air
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pollution
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 and bird strike. With the prosperity of
aviation
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the aviation
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 industry, there
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is more
ismore
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is more
air
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pollution
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 than before. Some
people
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 argue that
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the government should
tax
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 more on
air
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traffic
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. There are a number of factors at play, as I shall discuss below. On the one hand, some
people
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 might think it is not an effective way to
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 more on
air
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traffic
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,
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 because the companies would transfer the cost to consumers, which might let the companies make more profits.
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,
government
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 should take other measures to avoid
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 situation.
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tax
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 more on
air
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traffic
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 would reduce the desire of
people
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 to travel abroad, because they would face the growth
of
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 ticket prices,
the
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and the
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 cost of
traveling
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 abroad would be higher than before, in
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 way, the number of
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airplanes
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 would decrease, and it will
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 reduce the accidents and
air
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pollution
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 caused by
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airplanes
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. And others would think that the
air
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traffic
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 companies should take the
responsibilities
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 for the
air
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pollution
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, so it is reasonable to
tax
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 more on them. As far as I am concerned, I support
government
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the government
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 should
tax
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air
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traffic
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 more, but they should
established
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 complete laws to avoid the situations I mentioned above.
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, they
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 can use other ways to control the
air
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traffic
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,
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, they can restrict the number of
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airplanes
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to fly
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 abroad, in
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people
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 won't afraid of the increasing flying costs.
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