Many people want the country to host an international sporting event. While some people believe that international sporting events create problem, other believe they can bring significant benefits. Discuss both view and state your opinion.

Being an organiser of international sporting games
such
as the FIFA
world
cup or seagames is an
hornor
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honour
for a
country
and
however
, people are still debating between the advantages and disadvantages that
that
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events bring.In
this
essay,discuss both standpoints and review my opinion.
Firstly
,talking about
benifits
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benefits
that the
country
holding a sporting event will be well-known on the
world
,so that attract tourists.
For example
,After hosting seagames 31 in Hanoi the amount of visitors to Vietnam has increased significantly and contributed
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the development of
country’s
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the country’s
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economy.
Secondly
,the attendance of athletes and spectators from
others
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other countries
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country
create
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chances for socializing the culture and languages.
For instance
,the
world
cup is a global famous big tournament and it is taking place every 4 years so that host-nation’s
citizen
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citizens
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will welcome a large number of
visitor
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visitors
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from many countries with different languages and traditions.
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Therefore
Therfore
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Therefore
,they
are learn
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are learning
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more about the
world
outside,getting more
chance
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chances
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to
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and
practicing
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foreign languages
also
.
However
,the hosting
country
have
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to face
with
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some social issues,
such
as a high ratio of robbery and environmental pollution.The reason for
this
is that a large number of
foreigner
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foreigners
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come over in a period
time
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of time
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makes
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the
country
overload with security,leading to uncontrollability and theft
happen
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easily.Especially in Japan,a
country
famous for its safety and security but after Olympic 2020 took place in Tokyo,many people
have
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complained that they were surprised because their property was stolen in Japan.
Moreover
,because of too
much
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visitors so the amount of waste that was not collected in time causes air pollution. In conclusion,I do agree that hosting
a big sporting games
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a big sporting game
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like seagames or
olympic
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Olympic
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has some bad
efects
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effects
but it undeniable that it gives the hosting nation a good opportunity for economic development.
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