Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is a certain school of thought who have the notion that it is greatest to accept a poor condition
such
as lack of funds or
unsatisfactory
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job
, others opine that efforts should be employed to improve
such
conditions.
This
essay shall endorse the former view,
however
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the two divergent views shall
be outline
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after which a feasible conclusion shall be made. On one
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hand
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had
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, fear of not getting their
desire
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jobs is one of the enormous reasons individuals think it is preferable to accept any
job
. With the growing population and lack of
piece
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of work,
people
are forced to take up anything they are offered.Admittedly if
people
accept poor conditions
such
as unsatisfactory
job
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jobs
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,it can go a long way to affect their work output making them not
to
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put in their best.
For
example
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it was recently published that
people
who were forced into the teaching profession are not performing well and that has affected the students in their final exams.
This
has caused total failure for
this
year’s exams.
On the other hand
, taking up courses is the main reason some individuals believe it is better to improve. When
people
can upgrade themselves and get to higher ranks, they will
be have
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a wide range of opportunities to choose from and not be given anything
that is
not acceptable. Even though, if
people
upgrade and have a lot of opportunities available, that
not withstanding
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, they will still be faced with the increased unemployment rate affecting individuals globally and so will not have any option
than
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but
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to accept any offer.
For
instance
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it was reported that
,
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apply
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a lot of
masters
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holders who could not get the
manger
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manager
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positions have applied for divers and cleaners
position
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in the same company. In conclusion, after assessing the two divergent views, it is seen that the merit in accepting a poor condition is better. I will
therefore
recommend that
people
take up any
job
offered
them
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so they can make something small which can sustain them than
to
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apply
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stay idle waiting for their dream jobs .
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  • settle
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