Nowadays, we can see definite sign of surplus production in almost every industry sector and thus is leading to environmental damage. What is some possible solution to this situation?

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productions are increasing sharply.And
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of the environment in the air and water.
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the number of consumers
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increasing, and because
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increase as well. So that's because we live in a world the people in it really focus to have a
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income,so when the businessmen see that there is a high demon in a product they will produce it. But the huge number of manufacturers leat to a big
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"the environment
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". The
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that impact the ear, for ,
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that affects the atmosphere, so, that will lead to
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in the number of
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and the plants will not grow up well.
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, the west of manufacture. Some
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get ride of there west in a bad way for due they do not have a convenient
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the life under the water
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the fishes and can make some of the water sources not able to drink. There
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numerous solutions
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those problems.
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, the countries must do a deal between them to reduce the gases that come from their
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the countries must put lows that can decrease the impact of the gases and the way of the get
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of the wastes .
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the ramifications of
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the environment. To sum up,
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environmental pollution is now the main
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among
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open-minded people and scientists because they are aware of the dangers if
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people
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care about the plant
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