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Some people claim that what eat in many western countries is unhealthy and that their diet is getting worse. Critics say that these countries should change their diet. What are your opinions on this?

#people #countries #diet #critics #change
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widely believed that
people
's
diet
 is changing and they are following an unhealthy
diet
. Overwhelmingly I agree with
this
 subject. Given the fact that these days
people
 are busy and they do not have enough time and
also
 two-income family is rife, under these conditions individuals
diet
 has tied to takeout
foods
, where restaurants are trying to get more clients by unhealthy
foods
.
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 of them are overusing oils and it is a
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 call for
people
. Nowadays, obesity among family members is observable. The key to good health is eating a balanced
diet
. Sure,
people
 need
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exercise
excercise
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exercise
 as well as a balanced
diet
. Since
this
 modern life lends to lead us to an unhealthy
diet
, so oily
foods
 and fast
foods
 are instilling our lives.
Thus
, as soon as possible, these types of habits
are
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related to
diet
 should be improved. If we want to look
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in
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 a smaller scale, changes
of
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menu
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 in the restaurants are the
first
 and short-term
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solutions
solusions
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solutions
. In the following, by considering a long-term solution that officials and governments are in charge of it, by applying decent and intelligent methods and
also
 taking strict measures along with
diet
diet
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specialists, can change these conditions according to a healthy
diet
. In conclusion,
the
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modern life can be
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fisrt
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 and the most important factor of
this
 concern. I would say there is no doubt
people
 have
a
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 unhealthy
diet
 and it is getting worse. I will jump to the
critics
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 side and it is
a
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large
problems
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 in current society, especially
western
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in western
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 countries.
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