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Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the recent ,era there is a question that what
men
 can do and what
women
 cannot be able to do all are equal nowadays. The different
qualities
 of
men
 and
women
 cannot affect their jobs or lifestyle. I totally disagree with the given statement and mention the detailed reason in my following paragraph. In
this
 current ,world some individuals say that some
qualities
 of
men
 are not there in
women
. Nowadays there is no
difference
 between
men
 and
women
 because all
women
 are now more educated and more successful in their life. All
qualities
 that
men
 have
women
also
 have those
qualities
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qualities
.
For example
, a recent survey of employment in India
,
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has proven that in every field there are an equal amount of
men
 and
women
are
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there. So there is no discrimination against
women
 or
men
 they
both
 have equal
qualities
.
Moreover
, some people say that there are job differences in their certain work. But as
,
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far as I am concerned there is no
difference
 in the job section because
men
 and
women
both
 are the same literate and have some experience in their own field. So there is no
difference
 in their employment sector. To illustrate, in Bangalore there are many IT companies that vacant the same amount of
men
 and
women
 in their company because in the computer field there is some level of experience there in
men
 and
women
. SO it is proven that there is no
difference
 between
men
 and
women
. To conclude, there is no
difference
 between
men
 and
women
 because they
both
 are equally successful in their own fields and
both
 get equal jobs in their sectors. So I totally disagree with the writer's statement.
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  • social dynamics
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