17. Some people think that a persons improve their intellectual skills more when doing a group activity. To what extend do you agree.

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a key role in the way people lead their lives. While some people believe society should advance
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, other
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group
work
is better. In
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I will discuss
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both
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good
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opportunities
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opportunities
. On the one hand, some folks have different
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. Due to that those kinds can not
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of
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.
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in a company always something goes wrong with that.To illustrate, Cristiano Ronalda can not play with
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but soccer is playing with teams
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as a matter of fact, Ronaldo is on the best player list in the world.
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and gets more
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efficiency
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than
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he or she needs to start working with
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.
One
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the other hand, the researchers
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group
working is more effective than
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working, despite it is just 60% in all world.
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with
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your studying period can be higher than used to be.
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turkey
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schools and
companies
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they are pushing you to
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with
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because they want you to
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a lot of hours.
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, working with
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is a another way to improve your skills and I
also
agree with that too. All in all, taking the afore-mentioned point into account, it can be concluded that
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a good way. In my
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try
both
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of that thing and choose what is good for you.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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