Improvement in health, education, science and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations however the government or richer nations should take responsibility for helping the poor nations. Do you agree or disagree?

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this
modern era, many poor
countries
suffered from many
problems
such
as health , education , science and
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businesses
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all
problems
are very major to every
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therefore
many
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countries
come for the help. I completely agree if
this
will happen. Many
countries
have
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problem
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their education systems so their citizens suffer in many more sections
such
as medical,
sceince
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science
sectors so that many
country
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come to help these
countries
.
For example
, in India education quality has many
problems
and their students have faced many
problems
so if other states come to help people so they over to
this
matter and they
also
develop other sectors effectively.
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, many
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countries
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countries
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in medical and science
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fields
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that
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people of their country face many disadvantages.
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, in
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there are many
countries
suffered
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medicines , oxygen
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cylinders
calendars
calenders
and beds
problems
so that time many
country
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hepled
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helped
each other to overcome
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problems
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they progress their
infastructure
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infrastructure
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these sections are very
infispensable
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indispensable
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development and many
developcountry
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develop country
helped each other easily to find out
solution
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and helped
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they easily
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over come
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the
problems
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International solidarity
  • Economic disparity
  • Humanitarian assistance
  • Infrastructure development
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Foreign aid
  • Global partnership
  • Post-colonial economic structures
  • Philanthropy
  • Prosperity
  • Capacity building
  • Sustainable development goals (SDGs)
  • Trade imbalances
  • Aid effectiveness
  • Global citizenship
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