Many countries are experiencing population growth, and need to build more homes. Some say that new homes should constructed in existing cities while others argues that new towns should be built to accommodate the growing population. What are the advantages and disadvantages of these point of view?

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grovernments

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governments

need to

built

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more residential areas due to

growing

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population. While many believe that it should be built in current rural areas rather than develop a new town.

However

, more households in present

cities

could cause many different issues. New

towns

development can provide more spaces for living, enhancing

people

living conditions.

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easy

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will discuss both views in the following paragraphs.

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people

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cities

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also

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in various issues. Undoubtedly, more and more

people

tend to move to

cities

because they are well-developed, offer lots of employment chances, entertainment and leisure facilities provide

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experience to

people

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accessibility to anywhere.

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. In order to

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housing needs,

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built smaller and smaller by governments and developers, affecting

people

living conditions and standards.

On the other hand

, that could be an advantage if

people

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to move to new

towns

due to

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provide considerable spaces for accommodate. New

towns

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for housing and other land use,

people

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in larger spaces. Not only

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for their health

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but

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town planning, moving to

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best solution to solve

overpoplution

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overpopulation

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more construction of accommodations could cause

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in current

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development could be a trend for

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with increasing population.

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