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What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?

#water #pollution #effects #life #society
Undoubtedly it is true fact that deterioration is increasing day by day . It is a very serious obstacle in cutting -edge era . A lot of factors pollute corruption ,
Moreover
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 they produced many effects on
animals
 and the human soul . I will discuss the aspects and effects in the upcoming paragraphs . To commence with , a host of aspects influence the infection .
First
 a d foremost is plastic . To explain it , plastic is a non-biodegradable substance . It doesn't dissolve in the environment . And it produces many problems .
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 ,
last
 year research by environmental scientists has
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 that plastic is a non-biodegradable polymer and it is the biggest source of influence of making abuse. Another aspect is awareness . Masses have low awareness of deterioration. So it is a big deal to help pollute the abuse . ,
Also
 some individuals have swept away the waste material in the river which is the primary reason for drinking pollution. Shifting towards another problem , drinking infection produced many hurdles for
animals
 and human activity . drink corruption decreases the pH level of the drink . To explain it , when the
animals
 use
this
 rain . They faced many diseases.
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 , in the new article according to scientific research 2000
animals
 died in 2022 from drinking
this
 water .
Although
 ,
this
 drink takes an impact on human life
also
 .
Hence
 , rain Pollution produces many hurdles and disses for marine growth and human life. To sum up , the government should take action against
this
 and make a new rule to ameliorate the situation.
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