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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
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There is no doubt that
car
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 crush is the worst thing
in
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 the roads. There are many people who think asking driving
test
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 every
years
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 is the best way to make road transport
safe
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. I completely agree with
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 statement and in
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essay
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 I will support my view with examples.
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 every year, that because of a certain degree of society using
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a car
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car
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alcohol and sometimes very fast .To illustrate, in Turkey half of the traffic penalties are because of driving with alcohol.
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, some countries
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 traffic ,
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why I
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 that thing. To continue with, In some countries driving license
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 are very less despite
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that, teenagers are using cars without having a
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 license.
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, a group of
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 used
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a car
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car
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 without having a
driver
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 license and they
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with
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 another vehicle.
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, big vehicles
such
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 as trucks are very hard to use and need more attention than
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car
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 which is a basic form ,
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 of
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 drivers are not using
like
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 I said.
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, if we can not
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that problems
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 mean we need to make
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real a driving
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 each year. All in all, what can be concluded from
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 remarks is that
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test
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 every year is the best option for making roads safe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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