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“Many university students live with families while others live away from home because their universities are in different places.” What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?

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Some university
students
 live with their
families
 while others do not, depending on their campuses' location.
This
 essay will go deeper to state the benefits and drawbacks of each scenario.
To begin
 with,
students
 staying at
home
 can gain several advantages.
First
 of all, there would be no concern about dorm fees, which is really an upper hand.
Moreover
, it will be safer if
students
 live with their
families
 under the supervision of their parents. A study by the FBI has stated that there had been a large number of undergraduates who were being tempted by drugs due to immaturity when staying far away from
home
.
However
, there are two sides to every story, the thinking that family will always be there to give them a hand makes
students
 become less independent. On close inspection,
although
 university
students
 who live with their
families
 can save on dorm fees as well as have a safer living environment, they probably need to deal with the challenge called "avoid depending on anyone". Referring to the views of studying and living far from
home
, it can be said that
students
 will have a great chance to train themselves in a real society. Stepping out of their comfort zones called "family" is synonymous with
students
 must manage their life from the smallest. Even though they have to exert maximum effort to overcome drawbacks, the thing left could be a feeling of freedom.
Conversely
, homesickness is a common issue that
students
 living on their own have to deal with. Deciding to live on their own, they will have more duties and responsibilities to what they have done, I wonder in a cleft stick, have they ever wished to have their
families
 by their side. Having
freedom
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 to manage your life is great, but homesickness somehow might hinder your determination. In the final analysis, there are different advantages and disadvantages to both situations. Though
students
 living with
families
 have
advantage
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 of finance and security, they should not have been dependent.
On the other hand
,
students
 living away from
home
 seem to be more independent but homesickness could be their concern.
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