An increasing number of children are overweight which could result many problems when they grow older both in terms of their health and health care costs. Why do you think so many children are overweight? What could be done to solve this problem?

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number of people have the notion that a lot of

kids

are obese and

this

could lead to problems when they are old in relation to their health and health care.

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essay shall outline the cardinal reasons and profess

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to

this

occurrence after which a meaningful conclusion shall be made.

Firstly

, intake of junk foods is one of the many reasons people believe

kids

will have a problem later in life.

This

is because most of these foods that these

children

are given do not contain the right amount of nutrients needed for them to grow but rather sodium and cholesterol which tend to build up leading to hypertension and diabetes later in life. More so, lack of exercise is accounting

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this

problem. Most

kids

now do not have

time

for anything apart from the computer and classes.

Children

nowadays do not even walk but

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driven to school and back.They

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therefore

do not participate in any physical activity and so are not active and

consequently

,with

time

, they accumulate fats which tend to worry them in future.

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, it was recently reported that

children

leaving with diabetes and hypertension have increased from 2% to 5% in Ghana. In terms of

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, parents should make

time

out of their busy schedules to prepare homemade meals containing the right nutrients in their right proportion for their

kids

so they don’t rely on junk foods and drinks. Again the activities of the

kids

should be scheduled

such

that they can have a little

time

to exercise to burn any accumulated fat stored which can harm them in future. Availability of homemade meals and exercise will help

children

to be healthy.

For instance

, a recent survey conducted among school

children

indicates that

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kids

who were involved in the daily physical education exercises

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strong and fit. I’m conclusion, after considering the cardinal reasons and the proposed solutions,

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will

therefore

suggest that parents make

time

for their

kids

as the aftermath of what they eat can help or affect them.