when choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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to earn money for
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choosing a
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its salary. There is a lot of
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argued which
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for many
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but in general,
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disagree with
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phrase which we consider salary as
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most important reason to choose a
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spite
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guarantee
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chosen
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an employer
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get a responsibility to work harder and take care of the big target of his/her
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be a good
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empty
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relevant
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, so they can make a better decision and enhance their creativity.
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their work, automatically they tend to do the
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perfect way and in
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company
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researcher
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researchers
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because they like to do something for science and
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life.
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people
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argued their ideal
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doesn't exist and they live
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life just because of the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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