Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

It
is depended
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on
situation
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. At the weekend, my friends and I often gather to party
,
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or play football. On the other day, I stay at home and read books or listen to music. 7. Do you think
people
today have more
time
to relax than in the past? Absolutely not,
according to
some medical journals,
people
nowadays have more pressure
,
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and less
time
to relax than in the past. Because of the development of technology,
people
can
work
at home, far from the offices. But a lot of
people
still
work
until night at their home. 8. Do you think it’s important for
people
to have
leisure
time
? Of course, I believe that
people
should keep a balance between
work
time
and
leisure
time
. The first is produced
time
, the second is recovered
time
. 9. Do old
people
and young
people
spend their
leisure
time
in the same way? I think that the way
people
spend their
leisure
time
changes during their
life
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time
. When I was young, I
spend
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my
leisure
time
playing games. But now, I spend my spare
time
reading
book
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,
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and sometimes
visitting
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visiting
my relatives. 10. What do you think are the good points and the possible bad points about having
leisure
time
? To be honest, I think spare
time
help
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people
to recover after
work
. 11. How do
people
in your country spend their holidays? 12. Do you like to travel in your holidays? 13. If you had a child, what
leisure
places would you go to with your child? Well, if I had a kid, my kid and I would go to the park or
play ground
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together.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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