Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that government should spend public money on saving these languages, While others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some
languages
are at risk of being forgotten, for a reason, that plenty of people
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using
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. Few individuals think that government should invest in order to save these
languages
, but, others believe it's just a waste of money. In
this
essay, both opinions will be discussed before giving a conclusion. In general, having the government in using their resources to
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preserve
preseve
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preserve
languages
is a way of giving respect to
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, that no matter,
new
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dialects have
surface
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, ancient
languages
should still be held
importance
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for it is one of the things that still connects us to our roots.
Firstly
, in public schools, making a mandatory for
student
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to speak their native tongue will hold a firm foundation while they are still young.
Secondly
, funds to make books about
languages
or any educational material,
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should
be
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emphasize how important older
languages
are, even in
modern
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era.
On the other hand
, we're already living in
21st
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century,
instead
of investing funds
on
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our
languages
, it is more reasonable to allocate it to improve technologies and education that will help the economy to grow
further
. Different cultures have already mingled in our lives, they have various
language
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languages
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and sometimes it is more convenient to use in communicating
others
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with others
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. Nowadays, modern
languages
are easier to use and understand and
populace
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will not try to learn those ancient
languages
,
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if
it
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will only
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complicate
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in
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communicating
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. No matter how knowledgable and fluent a person can speak their mother tongue
,
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if the receiving end won't be able to understand it, it's still useless. In my opinion,
although
having to invest in
languages
in order to
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preserve
it, but if it is too hard to understand, or to speak even, it will be pointless,
instead
, using the resources to finance technologies
,
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and to improve our health and education system
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