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Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sport celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?

#doctors #nurses #teacher #contribution #society #entertainment #sport #celebrities
The nap boxes are designed by Itoki. In Japan, firms didn't disapprove of taking a nap at the workplace. A full-
time
 worker does an average of 180 hours monthly. Well, I think that it will be useful relaxing equipment, especially in Japan. You know. Japan is famous for
hard-working
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, and
also
 for overwork death. Designing suitable furniture, which takes up as small
area
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 as possible, is very helpful.At my workplace,
staffs
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 always have lunch breaks, which
last
 for an hour. I often feel more active and energetic thanks to my break period. Well, I think that in the morning and after break
time
, I am most productive at work. After these periods, I feel more logical and sensitive. I think that a raise in salary is helpful. Most of my colleagues complain about inflation. They think that they
spent
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 a
lot
 of
time
 working, and so they
suit
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 for higher salaries. I work over 200 hours monthly. The doctor is a busy job. I do the day shift,
night-shift
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. I
also
 have to attend a
lot
 of conferences and continuous medical education courses. My direct manager. She works really hard. I have seen that she still works at break
time
,
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 and in the late evening. One of my colleagues,
named
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Hoa, always is overworked. She not
even
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 works hard at the workplace, but she
also
 does a
lot
 of household chores. Of course not. In my country, there is an increasing trend of working
time
. Many officers, teachers and bankers still
do
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work in the late evening, especially on the
last
 days of each month. Well, I want to say " It is absolutely true". Not that I love sleeping, but a
lot
 of people become more productive, active, energetic, and logical after their sleep.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical role
  • healthcare professionals
  • societal well-being
  • disparity in income
  • skewed values
  • essential services
  • remuneration
  • mitigate
  • global shortages
  • inherent value
  • nurturing
  • compensation
  • societal contributions
  • profound impact
  • equitable distribution
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