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Big salary is more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree

#salary #job #satisfaction
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It is often argued that it is more advantageous to choose a
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 with a high wage,even if it doesn't appeal to you at all.I completely disagree with
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 opinion and think post satisfaction is much more important than high salaries.
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,I believe that
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 gratification gives people a sense of fulfilment that no money can guarantee even if someone is earning a high income but feels tense and compromise with his conscience.
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 person will not experience euphoria in his whole life while pursuing one's interest will always bring a sense of contentment and pleasure.
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,most scientists choose their career because of their pension in investigating knowledge not their appeal to high profits.
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 why It is more important to look for a kind of assignment that makes you happy rather than others which just bring money.
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, doing what you want keeps you motivated which leads to career growth.
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,there is a long relationship between being delighted and productive.individuals who are thirsty for their responsibilities will easily excel in their fields and triumph
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 results than those who put the money in the
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 place.
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 Henry Miller decided to leave his common and secure
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 in order to fulfil his life dream to be an author.at
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, after years of ups and ,downs he became one of the most successful writers who was the highest paid too in the twentieth century.
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 advantages of getting pleasure in what are you doing overweight the drawbacks of a low-gain
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 in the long perspective. In conclusion,I strongly believe that
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 satisfaction is more beneficial than high salaries because it makes humans more pleasure and motivated to make other promotions .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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