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There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter • Describe the problems • Explain how these problems are affecting you and others • Suggest what could be done about it

#transport #manager #company
Dear sir/madam I am writing
this
 letter to bring it to your attention that there is an issue with
bus
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 service from which I travel to my
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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 To embark
on
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, I am using
this
 facility since 2019 and it was worth commuting from it but,
from
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in
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past
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the past
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 few
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weeks
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week
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this
 journey is getting awful.
Firstly
, due to less number of buses during pick hours
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,
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there is
huge
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a huge
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 rush and passengers are not able to get seats
specially
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 elders people,
secondly
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 it always runs late
hence
 it lead to delay in reporting at
work place
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workplace
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.
Moreover
, the air conditioning
is
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does
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dose
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does
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 not
work
 properly as due to numerous commuters it leads to suffocation. As I am suffering from asthma it is nearly impossible for me to come and go by it. Apart from
this
, I would like to suggest
yo
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you
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 to implicate
few
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a few
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 changes which will cause
a
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relief to individuals who make
a
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use of your service.
Initially
,
the
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 good ventilation shaft should be installed if climate control does not
work
.
In addition
 to it,
few
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 new vehicles should be introduced which can distribute the pedestrian. Thank you for consideration of my request and hope to get a
positove
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positive
 revert from you soon. Yours faithfully,
Vandan
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Vandana
Vanden
 Patel.
Submitted by Vandanpatel0709 on

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