Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that should focus on subjects that they are good at or that they find the most interest discuss both side and give your opinion.

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verse, with several
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some said that they should focus on subjects that are good
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I will elaborate on both views and state my opinion. Education is the
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greater chances
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attaining a higher level in life.
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steps to take or pass through before
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through the kindergarten stage , and primary and
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he or she can be interested in and proper
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through the assessment test and examination ,
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from the result will help the
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, a
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courses
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interest
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but
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proper foundation should not be
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broad educational foundation
  • well-rounded individuals
  • versatile skill set
  • critical thinking
  • adaptability
  • natural talent
  • higher motivation
  • deeper understanding
  • career success
  • specialization
  • depth over breadth
  • focused study
  • expertise
  • middle ground
  • curriculum
  • fostering individual talents
  • engaged learners
  • successful professionals
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