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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer want to became teacher, particularly in secondary school. what are the reason for this, and how could the proble, be solved.

#countries #teacher #school #reason #proble
Nowadays, in many
states
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 number of
people
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teacher
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teachers
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 are getting
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, especially in
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highschools
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high schools
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. The main reason is that young students are
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adolescent
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 and
lecturers
 can not put up with their
inconvinent
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inconvenient
inconsistent
 behaviours. To deal with
this
 problem could be paid
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 salary to teachers.
To begin
 with,
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attitudes
 of young
people
 have bothered the
lecturers
 who are working in secondary schools.
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No body
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 would dispute the fact that the most unbearable term
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 young
people
 for teachers is
adolescent
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the adolescent
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 era when kids have been affected by diverse
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hormones
hormons
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hormones
 associated with their process of getting older.
For example
, generally, young
people
 have a tendency to do not obey the formal or informal rules due to
hormons
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hormones
 which are cited above and they have
admited
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admitted
 the
lecturer
 as a representer of
authorty
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authority
 that should be
opposited
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opposite
opposed
. To solve
this
 issue might be given to
highschool
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lecturers
 more money than other teachers. It seems to that giving
exra
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extra
 payment to these
people
 could be motivated them being
lecturer
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. By
this
 means,
this
 job can gain its charming to back and
lecturers
 might
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benefit
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 from
this
 opportunity.
For instance
, a young teacher
canditate
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candidate
may
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be consider
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be considered
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 the money issue and he could
be
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choose
being
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lecturer
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a lecturer
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 in secondary school. To conclude, the problem is that in a number of countries many
people
 do not want to be a
lecturer
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lecturers
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 in secondary schools caused by
inappropriate
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behaviors
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 of adolescents can
be solve
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 with extra payment to these
lectuters
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lecturers
lectures
letters
.
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