Old people compete with young people in the same job . Discuss and give opinion

In
this
contemporary epoch,there are a plethora of jobs,which have big
competitions
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with youths and elder
people
,because of the increase in numbers of unemployment.The reasons along with solutions
,
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will be
further
explained below.
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,many companies prefer to accept youngers, because they are highly qualified and have awareness
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the utilization of technology.
In other words
,if teenagers learn more about technical devices,they will be accepted promptly in lucrative Jobs rather than old
people
who have no knowledge about how to use
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computers.A prime example is that multinational corporations,in Egypt,hire
people
with high certificates and have information in the field of artificial intelligence.
Therefore
,the
juvenils
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juvenile
juveniles
should care
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their education to get a job with
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salary.
Furthermore
,the pivotal solution to tackle
this
issue is to provide training programs to
people
who are above 40 years to learn the usage of technology.To illustrate,when universities help seniors to gain experiences by teaching them all about the internet,
this
will open ways Infront of them to find job opportunities.
For example
,more foreign countries nowadays have become interested in teaching adults how to handle
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cutting-edge technology.
Thus
,
people
who are forty or above can learn more,and
this
may lead to
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the unemployment problems. In conclusion,after
this
essay has manifested the abovementioned points,it can be
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repaired
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that the authorities in each country should ameliorate
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highly
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burden of joblessness and provide them with all facilities to be able to obtain a well-paid job,which
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them to improve their lives.
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