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Band 4.5

Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Bar chart illustrates the mean daily hours spent in 2009, in the participation of recreational activities by
tourists
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 of different nationalities, Chinese, American, Turkish & Brazillian, while vacationing in Greece. Overall,
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 chart shows that the top 2 leisure
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 activities, irrespective of nationality were spending
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 on the beach and reading books.
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, the least amount of
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 by all was spent exploring new sites. It is interesting that the highest peak of
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 graph is by Chinese
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 spending an average of 8 hours a day reading books while they have the least amount of
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 spent at the beach in comparison to the rest of the nationalities. They
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 have the sharpest difference in spending equal
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 between activities. In ,contrast all other nationalities, have approximately a 2 to 3-hour difference between
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 spent on each activity. The split of the most popular activity can be divided into 2 groups. American and Chinese
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 in group 1 with reading as their favourite activity and Turkish and Brazillian
tourists
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 in group 2, with relaxing by the beach as theirs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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