More and more people today are moving away from where their friends and family live. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages

Nowadays, people prefer to move out of their native
place
where their family and local people live in search of
a good opportunities
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good opportunities
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and enhancement of
standard
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of living.
This
essay will decipher how the advantages outweigh the disadvantages
Firstly
, the major advantages
from
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staying away from their local
place
is
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are
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due to getting better opportunities, growth, and lifestyle. It is increasingly common in
modern
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the modern
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era that many
has
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changed their priorities and migrated to places where
career
enhancement, better standard of living and other facilities
is
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are
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easily available.
For instance
, in today’s world,
majority
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the majority
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of students enrolled
their self
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themself
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in foreign universities for better education,
career
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and career
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development and remain distant from the
place
where they lived earlier.
Secondly
, the disadvantages
from
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being distant from the native
place
is
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are
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that they may face challenges in survival, feeling isolated,
adaptability
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and adaptability
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issues may be due to climate change, environment, and language barrier.
However
, it all depends on the life goals of an individual. To illustrate
this
, Pupils
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who engage
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engage
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in
first
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line of defence may face challenges but choose their ambition and stay away from the
place
where friends and family live.
Thus
, individuals are becoming
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self-independent
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self- independent
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self-independent
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,
mature
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and mature
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and
learn
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learning
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how to survive alone without being around the native people and environment. To conclude, in today’s world many are opting to move out of their birthplace or local town
for
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development
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of
career
, surroundings and
achieving
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to achieve
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their goals.
Thus
, better life and
successful
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career
may outweigh its drawback which may come along
in
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a
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the
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path
such
as survival issues and
feeling
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feelings
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of isolation.
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