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Some Employers Want To Be Able To Contact Their Employees At All Times.Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

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There are some companies
that
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employers
 hope to contact their
staffs
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staff
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 all the
time
. I will discuss
positive
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the positive
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 and negative aspects of
this
 work style and suggest that the disadvantage outweigh the advantages. One of the advantages of
this
 style is that
communication
 between management people and
staffs
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staff
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 can be enhanced. Many companies have been accelerating and improving the online tools to work from home considering the impact of COVID-19 since
the
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early
ealry
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early
 2020.
Therefore
, everyone can easily communicate with each other whenever and wherever they want. Smooth
communication
 is one of the most important features in building good relationships
among
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 the same community.
For example
, prompt actions to inquiries from customers would satisfy them.
Also
, quick reportings of a mistake to bosses may recover the
company
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company's
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 reputation immediately.
Thus
,
these instant
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this instant communication
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communication
 may result in higher performance in the company.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages.
First
,
employees
 may always feel
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strong pressure even beyond their office hours. Everybody must have their private
time
such
 as family
time
 and individual
time
.
However
,
employees
 may not be able to enjoy their private
time
 due to the all-the-
time
 contacts from their
employers
.
Second
, both
employers
 and
employees
 may not be able to keep reliable and stable connections with too many contacts as
employees
 may feel that
employers
 may not trust their work and personality at all. It may translate into
the
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smooth
communication
 would be failed in the company. In conclusion, there are both positive and negative aspects
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on
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employer's
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employers'
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 desire to contact
employees
 all the
time
. I would
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argue
aurgue
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argue
 that
employers
 should have their
employees
 feel free outside of
the
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office hours.
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