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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What are the disadvantages to being employed.

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Nowadays, many individuals decide to run their own
business
instead
 of working for an organization or MNC' (
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 Company ). The long working hours and, low salaries can be the most important negative trend in
the
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organisations
Self- employment
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also
 has its own pros and cons which are discussed in the essay. The main reason that a person would like to be self-employed is that the income from
company
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the company
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 is not enough.
For example
, the overage rate of income in India is 25,000
ruppes
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rupees
 per month.
This
 money is not sufficient for an individual due to
high
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 rate of inflation.
Therefore
, students who recently graduated choose to become
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an entrepreneur
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entrepreneur
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entrepreneurs
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.
Furthermore
, the environment of companies
are
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 very uncomfortable due to
bad
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the bad
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behavior
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 of bosses, upper management and colleagues. As a consequence of
this
 , unpleasant atmosphere, many
individual
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individuals
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 decide to run their own
business
. One of the main drawbacks of
self-employed
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being self-employed
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 is the risk of
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bankruptcy
bankruptsy
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bankruptcy
 because of the
business
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business's
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 struggle to earn profits.
Moreover
, people have to learn when their line of work doesn’t
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 good. Some of them
underestimates
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 the risk factor.
This
lead
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 to
closing
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the closing
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 of employment. To illustrate , a recent report showed that most
of
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the new
business
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businesses
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 fail in their
first
 year.
Therefore
 one should be prepared to take risks and withstand failures. To conclude, people are more encouraged to start their own line of work
instead
 of
employed
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being employed
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to
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 an organisation which has awful working conditions.
However
, being an entrepreneur comes with great chances of failure.
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