Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more houses. Should these new homes be constructed in existing cities or should new towns be built in the countryside. What is your opinion?

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Urbanization is one of the major problems today. The increasing population of each country is
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a major reason for urbanization. Due to
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population most countries try to build new
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in the
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by creating new towns. Some countries try to develop these new
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in existing
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rather than not developing new
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. My opinion is developing new
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in existing
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is better than developing new
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in the
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I try to prove my opinion with examples. In the
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I will show the
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if government build new
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by creating new
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in the
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it will highly
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the
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for different reasons. Constructing new
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in the
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means it definitely destroys lots of
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Trees
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are doing essential services to maintain environmental cycles like the
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loss of the
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may be caused to the animals directly. Especially for vegetarians who are in the
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stage of the
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cycle
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it may highly affect the other stages
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environmental issue is the
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on the water
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. Developing new
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directly
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the stability of the soil. So if we develop new
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it may cause soil erosions. When it happens it may be the root cause of flooding. These are some facts that may directly affect to cycles of nature. Creating new
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not only affects the
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people
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. As I mentioned above paragraph when the
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are destroyed it will be really hard to find
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for
people
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members of the
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and they are playing different stages in the
food
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cycle
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unbalancing
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the
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cycle
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will directly affect the
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providing
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oxygen to the
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and they
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the
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carbon dioxide which is not good for
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Loss
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of
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directly causes air problems. Today we hear lots of news which causes death due to air
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. The maximum life period of
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may be rapidly reduced by urbanization. Other than that enjoying nature may help to relax our minds. But creating new
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directly affects that reason
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. Due to the above
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I feel that developing new
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in existing
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is better than developing new
houses
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in new
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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