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Some people think it is better for children to have many short holidays during the year. Others believe that it would be beneficial to have fewer, longer vocations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, there are many discussions about ranging vacations for
chilldren
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children
 in schools. Some argue that fewer periods with larger longevity are preferable,
some
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 argue that frequent and short
holidays
 are preferable. While frequent vacations allow
students
 not to be overwhelmed, in my opinion, longer
holidays
 are more appropriate for long-term deep
focus
, planning, and
stress
 resistance. The
first
 view might involve
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arguments
arguements
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arguments
 about
higher
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 productivity of
students
 during
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studying time. Due to many
holidays
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 kids are able to eliminate retained
stress
 and be more active during
the
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 studying sessions. In
such
 systems, examinations,
for example
, should be more successful.
However
, frequent
holidays
 lead to frequent
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interruptions
interuptions
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interruptions
of
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learning
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the learning
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 process and
focus
, decreasing
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efficiency
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the effeciency
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effeciency
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efficiency
 of large
modules
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 learning.
Therefore
,
students
 may experience a lack of deep understanding of themes and may retain only the surface knowledge, which
often
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 unreliable and unnecessary for
further
 education.
On the other hand
, few
holidays
 lead to
overwheling
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overwhelming
 and overstressing of
students
 during the studying process. A lack of
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 may appear as an irritated condition of
students
 and a plummet
of
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 efficiency. End-term examinations,
for instance
, would be less successful due to high levels of retained
stress
.
Nevertheless
, long learning terms give
students
 an opportunity to
focus
 deeply on a subject and plan complex
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.
Moreover
,
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interruptions
interuptions
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interruptions
 during
working
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 not only
develops
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develop
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 planning and focusing skills but
also
allows
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allow
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students
 to become resistant to stressful situations and deal with them
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the
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work. As far as I
concerned
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, being able to
focus
 and plan your own work
in
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long-term
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a long-term
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 perspective without frequent vacations and
stress
 resistance are more important aspects than successful examinations in school without a contemporary application in the future and a low amount of real pressure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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