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Over consuming sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that governments should take responsibility to control it. Others think that individuals should take responsibility forsugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#sugar #people #governments #responsibility #control #individuals #forsugar #intake
Sugars are needed in our daily life as our body requires
this
 substance to function.
However
,
coomsuming
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consuming
 an excessive
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amount
amout
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amount
 of
sugar
 can lead to many health problems
such
 as obesity and blood clot. Some viewers
belives
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 that the reason for the high consumption of sugars is
manily
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mainly
 because there are not any law regulations by the government to control
this
 problem.
However
, others
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that it is
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the individuals
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individuals
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individuals'
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 responsibility to take monitor their
sugar
 intake by themselves.
This
 essay will discuss both
point
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points
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 of view before it is finalized in the conclusion.
To begin
 with,
sugar
 intakes are extremely difficult to monitor given the reason that many
food
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foods
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 that we intake, may contain more
sugar
 than we have expected.
For instance
, a person who eats a carton of orange juice could have
reach
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 the limit of
sugar
 that has been recommended.
Furthermore
, by dinner time, a person could exceed the
sugar
 limits up to 3 times more than they should have, despite eating typically healthy. In order to solve the overconsumption of
sugar
, governments could possibly have law regulations, where food
company
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companies
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 reduced
its
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 number of
sugar
 they added
in
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to
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 their products. Given the reason, it allows the overall population to consume less
sugar
, remain healthy, and feel better about their body and their
self-
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self-esteem
asteem
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esteem
.
On the contrary
, allowing governments to take
responsbilities
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responsibilities
in
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for
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 lowering
individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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sugar
 consumption may not be as easy as it sounds.
Initially
, from a young
age
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 we have treated high-
sugar
 content desserts, sweets and snacks as part of a reward in our life.
Thus
, we are familiar with the lifestyle of eating
those particular food
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that particular food
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.
Hence
, when
government
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the government
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 chooses to remove or reduces the amount of
sugar
 in those childhood candies, people tend to feel restricted and restrictions
leads
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 to wanting more.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sugar intake
  • overconsumption
  • government intervention
  • taxation
  • educational campaigns
  • health risks
  • food labeling
  • consumer awareness
  • self-regulation
  • personal responsibility
  • dietary choices
  • public health policy
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