Over consuming sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that governments should take responsibility to control it. Others think that individuals should take responsibility forsugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sugars are needed in our daily life as our body requires

this

substance to function.

However

coomsuming

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consuming

an excessive

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amount

amout

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amount

sugar

can lead to many health problems

such

as obesity and blood clot. Some viewers

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that the reason for the high consumption of sugars is

manily

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mainly

because there are not any law regulations by the government to control

this

problem.

However

, others

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believe

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belive

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believe

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that it is

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the individuals

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individuals

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responsibility to take monitor their

sugar

intake by themselves.

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essay will discuss both

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of view before it is finalized in the conclusion.

To begin

with,

sugar

intakes are extremely difficult to monitor given the reason that many

food

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foods

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that we intake, may contain more

sugar

than we have expected.

For instance

, a person who eats a carton of orange juice could have

reach

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the limit of

sugar

that has been recommended.

Furthermore

, by dinner time, a person could exceed the

sugar

limits up to 3 times more than they should have, despite eating typically healthy. In order to solve the overconsumption of

sugar

, governments could possibly have law regulations, where food

company

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reduced

its

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number of

sugar

they added

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their products. Given the reason, it allows the overall population to consume less

sugar

, remain healthy, and feel better about their body and their

self-

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self-esteem

asteem

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esteem

On the contrary

, allowing governments to take

responsbilities

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responsibilities

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lowering

individuals

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sugar

consumption may not be as easy as it sounds.

Initially

, from a young

age

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we have treated high-

sugar

content desserts, sweets and snacks as part of a reward in our life.

Thus

, we are familiar with the lifestyle of eating

those particular food

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Hence

, when

government

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the government

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chooses to remove or reduces the amount of

sugar

in those childhood candies, people tend to feel restricted and restrictions

leads

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to wanting more.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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298 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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some people say history is one of the most important School subjects.other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.