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With internet improvement people can & opinions on certain goods or service that they purchased. Is this good or bad thing? . Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#internet #improvement #people #goods #service
The bar chart presents data about the
number
 of
visitors
 to three London
museum
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 from 2007 to 2012. Overall, both
British
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the British
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museum
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 and National Gallery increased in visitor numbers while Victoria and
Albert
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museum
 decreased in numbers. From 2007 to 2009, the
number
 of
visitors
 to
British
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the British
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museum
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museums
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 declined by half to its lowest
number
, which reduced from 12
millions
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 (
M
) to 6M, while Victoria and Albert
museum
 remained the same for one year but dropped from 13M to 9M in 2009.
In contrast
, National Gallery rose from 6% to 8.5% in the two years. From 2009 to 2012, the
number
 of
visitors
 to
British
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museum
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museums
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 ascended back to its original
number
 of
visitors
 in 2011 and
further
 increased to 14M, while National Gallery gradually increased from 11M to 16M. In the meantime, Victoria and
Albert
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museum
 saw a minor decrease in the
first
 year to 7M, which reaches its lowest point
,
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 but turned to ascend steadily in the remaining two years.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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