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Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money. This practice can act as an incentive for some but may also have a negative impact on others. To what extent is this style of management effective? Are there better ways of encouraging employees to work hard? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is quite common that
employer
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give
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 some extra money as
reward
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of
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 their subordinates. In most
of
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the case
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case
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, it did
work
 to encourage the
staffs
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 to keep working hard and make more contributions to the
company
.
However
, there are more and more factors
would
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 influence
employees's
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 feeling, an excellent
work
 environment
in
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corporation
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a corporation
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 is one of
an
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important factors.
For instance
, most of the office workers spend one-
third
 of
time
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 in the
company
, if the atmosphere in
company
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 is terrible, it will not only result in a huge impact
of
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the individual
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individual
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 but make the employees escape from
this
company
.
Also
, It is easier to feel gloomy when they stay in a place where
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them
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 feel uncomfortable.
Moreover
, I consider that building a good relationship with
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a subordinate
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subordinate
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 is a key to
lift
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 up the employee's willingness to contribute to the corporation. It is similar to
build
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 a wonderful
work
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environment
envionment
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environment
 but the key
on
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 the employers. Because the attitude of the supervisor may influence the feeling of the subordinates, if the supervisors show their consideration and
passionate
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, it will make the employees feel confident to complete the task. In my opinion, it is quite
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important
imporatnt
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important
on
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high
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a high
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 salary whereas our life
is not only focus
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 on
the
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money. We can try to
purse
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 several kinds of requirements
of
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 our
work
. The point of making money is for a better life
,
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 if we can do anything and sacrifice our limited time and health. It is not actually worthy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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