some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. others disagree and think that the host contry should welcome cultural differences. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

believe that tourists should respect and trace local customs and attitudes, while others think differently about the host country’s hospitality and manner to various cultures. I want to argue
points of view in
essay but in my opinion,
groups should cope with each other. On the one hand, the tourism industry is gradually grown in
century because of globalization and peace between the countries,
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nowadays visitors can conveniently travel and accustom
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new cultures and their traditions,
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habitants treat them frostily because, majority of visitors are completely different to native residents,
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clothes, language, etc.
if tourists wear the traditional clothes of the host country, they will warmly be welcomed.
On the other hand
, countries should provide appropriate circumstances for local
and their environment if they want to be the host,
, the majority of issues with these individuals is they do not have proper infrastructure
as schools and hospitals, etc,
maybe misunderstanding happened when they are facing new
and specifically foreign.
, if hosts act better and accept other cultures when guests came to their city or village it would be enlightenment and lucrative for the government because when visitors feel positive and tranquil they probably enjoy their trip and buy more souvenirs, despite the journey they will counting days for visit the place and
to refresh good memories. To conclude,
groups should respect and percept each other’s culture, beliefs
it would be a massive experience for
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