Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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consistently proves to be a veritable minefield of controversy, with a chasm separating the opinions of the opposing sides. In spite of
this
,
this
paper will navigate through the discord and illustrate in
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fashion why the stance that__ view you
accept__is
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better grounded.   A spurious point of view on
this
matter takes the shape of the opinion that__view you reject__.
Nonetheless
, erroneous as
this
position is, its adherents are not bereft of arguments. One major contention they offer is that__their argument__.Essentially because __reason__.Admittedly, some evidence does indeed attest to the truth of
this
. In 2013, the university of Cologne ran a study into
this
which concluded that__evidence__.
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other studies have challenged and partially negated the veracity of
this
research. Sufficient doubt certainly exists to discount, if not fully disregard
this
line of argument.   A more judicious perspective on
this
issue is that__view you accept__.Perhaps the most powerful aspect of
this
argument is the concept that __your argument 1__.
This
is fundamentally because__reason__.Highly convincing evidence of
this
is readily obtainable. In 2019, the Czech government carried out extensive research which indicated that__evidence__. In my assessment,
this
is deeply persuasive.   An equally potent point that can be made in support of
this
thesis is simply that _argument 2__. The principal reason for
this
is that __reason__. Incontrovertible proof of the rectitude of
this
assertion is contained in the findings of
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research concluded over the period 2013-2015, by the European commission. The study established that __evidence__.
Therefore
, I feel
this
case is on a firm footing.   It is manifest that the controversy which surrounds the issue of if __
topic__is
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immense. It is evident equally that
this
is a subject of considerable social import.
This
essay has established, through an examination of the rival schools of thought, that the perspective that
__
view you accept
__
is superior.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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