In many countries crime rates among teenagers are higher than among other age groups. What are the causes of this problem and what can be done to solve it?

The table illustrates
average
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the average

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wages of various professional
degrees
in 2005, while the bar chart portrays the unemployment rate of the population in the US. Overall, it is apparent from the table that those who had higher professional
degrees
earned more money.
In addition
, people without higher education did not have a job in most cases. The table represents
salaries
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the salaries

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of people with different
degrees
. The largest average wages got those who had a Doctoral degree, $1740, while the lowest amount of money ($538)
earned
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was earned

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individuals
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by individuals

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who did not possess even a high school diploma. With the growth of the qualification the average earnings rose,
however
, holders of a Professional degree got more ($1800) than people with a Doctoral one. The bar chart shows the proportion of
population
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the population

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without a job. The highest rate (approximately 81%) was among those who did not graduate from high school.
Then
the percentage steadily declined with a decrease in the level of education,
nevertheless
, the proportion of unemployed with
a
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apply

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Professional and
a Doctoral
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Doctoral degrees
a Doctoral degree

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degrees
was the same (15%).
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