Many crimes are often related to the consumption of alcohol. Some people think that the best way to reduce the crime rate is to ban alcohol. Do you think this is an effective measure against crime? What other solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, a lot of crimes are committed due to people under the influence of
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. Some of these offences are minor;
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, others have serious consequences and can even lead to someone’s death.
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, the proportion of
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believes that banning
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alcohol
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can reduce the number of delinquencies.
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, I think that it is not the way out and other measures should be taken. I agree that many offences happen because of drunk individuals. Notwithstanding,
alcohol
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does not turn people into monsters; it can only release all human desires outward and let them do things that in
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state they would be afraid to do.
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, a person who intends to murder another individual may be too frightened of the punishment. Being drunk, he or she will not think of
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aftermath of
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person is potentially perilous for others. The only situation, when
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has a great impact is car accidents.
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, I am certain that they happen only because of people’s irresponsibility. In my opinion, other measures should be taken to reduce the delinquency rate.
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, perpetrators ought to be punished stricter than now. I believe that fines for exceeding the speed limit should be higher and
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of imprisonment for major crimes longer. Some kinds of punishment,
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as a life prison sentence are deemed too cruel, but I am sure that premeditated murders should have
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a penalty. It will make people
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think twice before committing an intentional offence. In conclusion,
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is not the reason for all troubles. I am certain that more depends on a person.
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, higher fines and stricter punishments are
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better
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to reduce the crime rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • consumption of alcohol
  • effective measure
  • ban alcohol
  • contribute to
  • types of crimes
  • other solutions
  • reduce the crime rate
  • education
  • awareness programs
  • stricter law enforcement
  • penalties
  • support
  • rehabilitation
  • alcohol addicts
  • root causes of crime
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