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Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below illustrates how many
games
 by four categories were sold per
year
 in the period from 2000 to 2006 over the world. Overall, it is clear from the graph that the general number of sold
games
 rapidly increased at
this
 time.
However
, the most popular
games
 by a wide margin from
year
 to
year
 were the Handheld
Games
. As you can see, in 2000 only Console and Handheld
Games
 were in demand and the revenue from it was about 6 and 11
billions
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of
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dollars
 correspondingly.
Nevertheless
, in the
next
year
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 some
of
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Online
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the Online
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Games
 were
also
 sold, but the proceeds of it were no more than a billion
of
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dollars
. The bar
of
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 2002 includes Mobile Phone
Games
at
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 the
first
 time on the graph. Over the years the revenue of it
rised
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raised
rises
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form
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 2 to 7
billions
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. Despite the main
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tendency
tendence
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tendency
 of
games
 to be more and more trending, the number of Console
Games
 is
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filled
falled
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 from 6 000 000
dollars
 in 2000 to 3 000 000
dollars
 in 2006.
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