Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays television and computer games became the most popular form of entertainment among people. It is often believed that the violence displayed on these platforms has a harmful impact on society.

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agree that being exposed to horror in any shape or form has a negative impact on someone's mind. In

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I will give reasons why I do believe so.

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, watching content like thriller movies can be very traumatic for young children. Eventually, when someone

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horror movies they tend to have numerous nightmares.

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to create numerous types of phobias.

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developed new phobias like trypophobia compared to the rest of the country's population.

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violence through entertainment devices proved to trick young minds into being cruel. In fact, a child’s mind is often compared to a sponge,thereby young girls and boys almost always repeat the

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they see.

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they will most likely act brutally themselves.

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, the psychologist

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conducted an experiment where he showed 5 teenagers how to kill a mouse for several weeks, once they reached adulthood, all five of them showed psychopathic patterns in their psychoanalysis records. In conclusion, vicious

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became more and more common in how we entertain ourselves. In my opinion, brutality has a big impact

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our minds and can be the origin of distraught

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Topic Vocabulary:

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aggressive behavior
emotional and psychological development
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Fully explain your ideas

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