Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays television and computer games became the most popular form of entertainment among people. It is often believed that the violence displayed on these platforms has a harmful impact on society.

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way of behaving. I personally

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agree that being exposed to horror in any shape or form has a negative impact on someone's mind. In

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I will give reasons why I do believe so.

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, watching content like thriller movies can be very traumatic for young children. Eventually, when someone

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horror movies they tend to have numerous nightmares.

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to create numerous types of phobias.

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developed new phobias like trypophobia compared to the rest of the country's population.

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violence through entertainment devices proved to trick young minds into being cruel. In fact, a child’s mind is often compared to a sponge,thereby young girls and boys almost always repeat the

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they see.

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they will most likely act brutally themselves.

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, the psychologist

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conducted an experiment where he showed 5 teenagers how to kill a mouse for several weeks, once they reached adulthood, all five of them showed psychopathic patterns in their psychoanalysis records. In conclusion, vicious

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became more and more common in how we entertain ourselves. In my opinion, brutality has a big impact

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our minds and can be the origin of distraught

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aggressive behavior
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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers. Others believe that a woman's role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

Some people believe that uniform should be made compulsory part of the workplace, some disagree, discuss both view and give your opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

The beat way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent to you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any examples.