IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Some employees want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

#employees #contact #staff #times #holidays #development
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Work
Use synonyms
 is the ability to do something and for
this
Linking Words
 ,reason individuals or institutions employ other people to
work
Use synonyms
 for them and be paid. Some of these job givers expect their employers to be available for them at all times, even on ,
days
Use synonyms
 they are not supposed to be at
work
Use synonyms
. I think the downside of
this
Linking Words
 is more than the upside. In
this
Linking Words
 essay, I will highlight both advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
Linking Words
, when employees get the chance to call on their staff every
day
Use synonyms
, they are able to make more money. Some people are only available on holidays and
that is
Linking Words
 when they seek the services of service providers. When a customer requires a particular service, he or she calls the employer. The employer
then
Linking Words
 directs the job to his
work
Use synonyms
 and after gets paid
thus
Linking Words
 gaining extra money even on an off
day
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, a parent may need extra tuition for his ward and will contact the principal of a school. The principal in turn calls the teacher who will offer the service and will get paid.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the demerit of
this
Linking Words
 is employers will not have rest
days
Use synonyms
 which will be detrimental to their health as stress can make one fall sick. When workers are called to
work
Use synonyms
 every
day
Use synonyms
, it means no
day
Use synonyms
 to rest and relax.
Additionally
Linking Words
, they won't have the chance to socialize with friends and family and learn new things. People see holidays as
days
Use synonyms
 they can do anything other than
work
Use synonyms
. If these
days
Use synonyms
 are taken from them, it can stress them out. In conclusion,
although
Linking Words
work
Use synonyms
 owners being able to call on their workers on their off
days
Use synonyms
 means extra money for the worker, the demerit which is workers not getting time to de-stress outweighs that advantage.
Submitted by vanessaboateng2019 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: