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the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table and the charts depict information on the
police
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budget
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 for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. Particularly, The table shows where the
money
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 came from and the charts show how it was distributed. It is clear from the graphs that the
police
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budget
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 increased in 2018 by more than 10.1m .
According to
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 what is shown, in 2017 , the total
police
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budget
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 was 304.7m which was spent for accounting 75 per cent on salaries for officers and staff.
Then
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 only 8% for technology .
While
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 in 2018, the
police
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budget
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 was bigger,
but
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a good amount of
money
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 was spent on technology which lead to declining salaries.
To sum up
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, we could say the biggest amount of
money
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 has gone to the National government in both these years.
In addition
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 the
budget
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 for local taxes a bit increased.
Furthermore
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, in 2018, a lot of
money
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 is spent on buildings and transportation
instead
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 of salaries as occurred in 2017.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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