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The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
water
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 usage for industry,agriculture and household in six regions of the world which included North
America
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, South
America
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,
Europe
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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.
Overall
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, agriculture is the largest consumer of
water
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 in Central
Asia
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, Africa and South East
Asia
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while
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Europe
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 and North
America
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 consume more
water
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 for industrial purposes than other sectors. In Central
Asia
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, Africa and South East
Asia
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,a significant amount of
water
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 is used by agriculture, at 88%,84% and 81% respectively.
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, none of these regions hasn't reached at least 10% of
water
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 consumption for industrial or domestic usage except South East
Asia
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 which has consumed 12 per cent of
water
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 for industrial use. Even though South
America
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 uses proportionally less consumption (at 71%) for agricultural purposes, it has the largest usage of
water
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, at 19% for household activities than the aforementioned three areas. In comparison, industry accounts for the largest proportion of
water
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 consumption in
Europe
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 and North
America
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, at 53% and 48% respectively.
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, in both
areas
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 residential
water
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 is the smallest percentage, at 15% in
Europe
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 and 13% in North
America
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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