Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

We are living in a society which is on the big scale very unsatisfied with their current occupation as they are either not good at the job or not meant for it.
Therefore
is to wonder what are the reasons for
this
and what are the consequences of
this
situation.
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essay will take a look at these questions and will provide a logical conclusion. Starting by looking at the reasons for
this
unsatisfaction in the workplace
is
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, one the one that earning good money is by far more important than going after
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dreams.
For instance
, do many
people
already in young age decide to study
bussiness
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business
not because they have talent and passion in
this
field, but because they know it will open the doors financial stability and independence.
Furthermore
, are there
also
too many who just and simply do not have the guts to go after what they really want in life, either out of fear or out of laziness
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An example somebody who works as an accountant in a law firm for many years,
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even though
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even though
they do not like it there and do not find
them self being
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happy because of it, might stay in
this
position anyways because they got used to the routine and are
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scared of what would happen if they would quit. The consequences of
this
situation
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however
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, that we are living in a society of bitter and unhappy
people
who transmit their negative feelings to their social
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sour rings
spurrings
and, which is a red flag, to their Kids. These children will grow up thinking that
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happiness
happens
happines
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happiness
in life is rare and that going after
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true
dreams
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is something that only happens in
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movies. To conclude, many
people
go through life finding themself in a job that they are not meant for which
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fulfils
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them out of the reason that earning good money is more important than a dream job and that many
people
do not put in the effort to go after what they really want.
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unhappy society and unless we don’t
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encourage
encourge
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encourage
people
more to put their
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happiness
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happiness
before anything else
this
situation is very unlikely to change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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