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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show the development of a small fishing village and its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show the development of a small fishing village and its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two diagrams compare the development of
fishing
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a fishing
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 village
which
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apply
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located
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is located
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 in
the
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a
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 mountain with
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a harbor
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harbor
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harbour
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 between 1974 and 2004.
It is clear that
 the population of
this
 village had
significant
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a significant
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 rise to almost seven times as people in 2004.
Also
, there are more hotels and beaches were built over the 30-year period.
By contrast
, the area for woodland transformed into
golf
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a golf
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 course, and the original villages with more tourist
shop
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shops
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 in
a
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the
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 year 2004. Looking more closely at the map in 1974, the majority of
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the region
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region
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regions
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 were applied to
raised
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raise
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the
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apply
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animal,
such
 as sheep and
goat
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goats
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.
Furthermore
, the buildings and roads were obviously less than a year in 2004.
Overall
, the development of
this
 fishing village had enormous changes over the period of 30 years, with more people who decided to reside here for
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry.
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