The youth in many countries are unemployed and unskilled, while at the same time, the Military services are in need of people. Compulsory military service is beneficial and necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued by some that mandatory
army
service
is favourable and requisite.
In these
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days, I reckon that it is
demandable
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a demandable
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and
requirement
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a requirement
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of many
nations
and it is useful for countries.
This
essay will shed light on the benefits and requirements and will
also
elaborate on my views for stating that obligatory
army
defence
is more favourable for the
nations
. To commence with, nowadays most
of
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youngsters are jobless and
non-skill
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unskilled
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in many kingdoms and facing
shortage
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a shortage
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of
skill
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manpower.
By implementing
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this
rule to join
army
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the army
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service
is obligatory which
help
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helps
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to create employment in
nations
. To explicate
it
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apply
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, if they hire employees from the provinces and give them training
of
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in
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defence
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the defence
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system
which
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it
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can lead to
increase
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employment
as well as
skilled
staffs
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staff
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of the
nations
.
For instance
, there is
rule
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the rule
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in Israel
country
that one person from the family has to join
defence
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the defence
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system
and serve
for
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apply
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the nation
to be
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strong
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strongly
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defence
services.
As a result
, Israel is
most
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the most
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powerful
country
in
defence
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the defence
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system
and helps many countries
for
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with
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protection despite of small
country
with
limited
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a limited
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population.
Furthermore
, most
of
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individuals are not ready to join
army
service
as they want to live in freedom
along with
their families. To explain it, if
army
service
would be essential for citizens to pursue it
then
we can solve the problem of manpower in
defence
systems.
Hence
,
nations
would have
colossus
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army
to protect.
Lastly
,
nation
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would be stronger and
powerful
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more powerful
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by joining numerous people of the
country
.
In addition
, people can get
job
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a job
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easily and gain
require
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required
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skills which can help in their future.
In other words
, individuals can get work and fulfil their family
requirement
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requirements
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and can grow in future even after completion of
defence
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a defence
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job
. To epitome, recently
survey
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has been conducted by
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the ministry
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ministry
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Ministry
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of
defence
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Defence
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that after leaving
army
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an army
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job
, almost one lac officers got
job
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a job
the job
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in
security
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the security
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field in top companies which are most demandable currently and it helps to survive their families and make
career
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a career
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in
this
field. In conclusion, I totally agree with the opinion that sentencing the mandatory
army
service
is significant and
necessity
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necessary
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of
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for
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the
country
. It leads to
generate
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generating
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employment and
solve
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solving
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the shortage of manpower issue in
defence
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the defence
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system
. People will be employed easily and make their
career
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careers
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in other fields after
finish
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finishing
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their tenure to grow in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compulsory
  • Military service
  • Unemployed
  • Unskilled
  • Discipline
  • National pride
  • Civic duty
  • Enlistment
  • Conscription
  • Cohesive society
  • Civilian life
  • Government resources
  • Ethical concerns
  • Forced enlistment
  • Individual freedoms
  • Psychological effects
  • Personal beliefs
  • Societal tensions
  • Career disruption
  • National security
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