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A lot of places in the world rely on tourist as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. The advantages and disadvantages of this fact.

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Tourism is a vital source of development for the nation. Travelling is regarded as a primary earning business in
places
 around the world
however
 it will decline business if it is not maintained properly and leads to an inferior situation.
This
 essay will suggest some benefits and drawbacks of
this
 statement. On the one side,
touristry
 is used to develop the nation economically. Maintaining tourism will give more profits. Society gets employed with
touristry
 in their local region. The unemployed communities get a chance to get jobs in tourist
places
. Various restaurants will be established near the tourist
places
 and provide different food items to the tourists.
For example
, for tourists who visit Hyderabad as their
touristry
 place,
then
 the restaurants in Hyderabad will serve biryani for the tourists, it is a famous food item in Hyderabad.
On the other hand
, Without proper ,maintenance it will engender to defame the
touristry
 country.
Touristry
places
 should be controlled properly
otherwise
 it will lead to the downside.
This
 may
also
 cause pollution to the environment. To sum up, It is good to have
touristry
places
 to develop their nation meanwhile it should be maintained in a good way.
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