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I've completed my Masters and Bachelor of Education from India.Currenly, I work in a primary school located in Surrey, BC. I worked for 3 years as a Science teacher in India. I’ve found that one of the best techniques for engaging students is to incorporate technology in my lesson plans, and to this end, I've utilized tools such as Microscope to create interactive activities and to achieve learning outcomes when teaching about DNA in plant cells.

Hello everyone, Greeting! It’s my pleasure to introduce myself as Baljit. I was born and raised in Punjab, India.  I've completed
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Microbiology
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 of Education from India.Currently, I work in a primary school located in Surrey, BC. I worked for 3 years as a Science teacher in India. I’ve found that one of the best techniques for engaging students is to incorporate technology in my lesson plans, and to
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 as Microscope to create interactive activities and to achieve learning outcomes when teaching about DNA in plant cells. My hobbies are reading books and travelling. My strength is my willingness to take on new challenges and strive for perfection. I’m a
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 person who doesn’t like to give up. I strive for what I want and keep my goals in mind 24/7.
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how I will get it. I love to be sociable and I am described as a calm and
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. There are four members in my family. It includes me, my husband, my mother-in-law and my Father-in-law. My family is supportive. The time we get to spend with each other is priceless and I enjoy it very much. I took
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 course because professional development is an important part of becoming an effective educator; it is a way for me to advance my teaching career while developing useful knowledge and practical teaching skills. That's all about me. Thank you!

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