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In some countries, people waste a lot of food which is bought in shops and restaurants. What do you think are the reason? What can be done to solve this problem?

#countries #people #waste #food #shops #restaurants #reason
Nowadays ,
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 of unnecessary meal dishes which have taken from food marketing is an important
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,
although
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to
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some pieces of evidence in upcoming
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paragraphs
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this problems
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. In a beginning , serving foods in a
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restaurant
restuarant
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restaurant
 is an
entartainment
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entertainment
 for many individuals and
costumer's
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customer's
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 decision is based on affection
instead
 of real demand for solving starving ,alongside, cooking chefs are trying to use many attractive ingredients to design
a
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delicious dishes
that
is
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 more attractive for people ,all of above ,it is clear that
allthings
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all things
 in these meals will not eat by the persons.
Secondly
 ,hypermarkets have
a vast types
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 of goods that are more selective by consumers and
this
 selection has been constructed by tentative
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advertisement
advertisment
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advertisements
 by companies ,so , it
have
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 seen when
a persons
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a person
persons
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 bought some food packages ,they have
been become
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 regretful of their shopping ,so, they might
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 from that .
As a result
,
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governments
government
goverments
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governments
 must tackle
this
 problem by legal observation in
production
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 of foods ,
in addition
of
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, TV designer programs must publish educational movies on
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 of value indexes of nutrients in
human
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the human
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 diet
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that
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 they can control their excitement in
public
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location
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 to request foods
such
 as
restuarants
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restaurants
.
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