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advantages and disadvantages of laying video games for children?

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Video
games
 are new entertainment nowadays. They are creative and They spread in all fields. They have been made for all age groups. Most of that
video
games
 are made for
children
.
Although
 they have benefits, they have some drawbacks too. In
this
 essay, I write about both of them. There are many advantages of playing
video
games
 for
children
. The
first
 advantage is creating coordination between the brain and hands. When
children
 play
video
games
, they have to see monitors and do their activities with their hands. There are lots of levels in
video
games
 that
children
 play section after section. Each level is different from another one. So, they learn to play with different computer gadgets at the same
time
. The
second
 advantage is learning to work in a group. Most computer
video
games
 are online
games
, and players have to play with other people all around the world. it does not matter how old is a player.
As a result
, they learn to communicate and work with other people.
Although
 playing
video
games
 for
children
 have benefit. It is having some disadvantages too. Playing
video
games
 for a long
time
 cause destroys
children
's creativity. When they are playing
games
, they follow game rules and they do have not enough
time
 to think about their environment and play mental
games
. It is one of the drawbacks and the
second
 is an effect on
children
's behaviour. When
children
 play
video
games
, they imagine that they are a hero of that game, so they try to imitate the hero of the
games
.
As a result
, their behaviour changes in the real world. In summary, playing a
video
 game for
children
 has lots of benefits
such
 as creative coordination between the brain and hands and they learn working in a group.
However
, if they play for a long
time
. it has some disadvantages like, destroying creativity and changing their behaviour.
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